Okay - a couple of observations; when the propellers first jump up, there's something too orderly about the way they all get to their 'feet' - can you add a bit more naturalism to that moment by adding greater variance into their movement - they all face the same way when they first stand up - maybe consider alternating the way they face?
The cut shots are really working, Aidan - and I think you could mirror this approach in some of the sequences that follow - it lends energy and cinematic gusto to that first sequence which you should carry over into the rest of your piece.
Similarly I think you should re-consider the way you're staging the flight of the propellers towards the horizon; think about the camera following them, think about inter-cutting etc - try some alternate coverage and let's take a look.
Evening Aidan :)
ReplyDeleteOkay - a couple of observations; when the propellers first jump up, there's something too orderly about the way they all get to their 'feet' - can you add a bit more naturalism to that moment by adding greater variance into their movement - they all face the same way when they first stand up - maybe consider alternating the way they face?
The cut shots are really working, Aidan - and I think you could mirror this approach in some of the sequences that follow - it lends energy and cinematic gusto to that first sequence which you should carry over into the rest of your piece.
Similarly I think you should re-consider the way you're staging the flight of the propellers towards the horizon; think about the camera following them, think about inter-cutting etc - try some alternate coverage and let's take a look.