Interim Online Review 09/11/10Hey AidanAgain, your productivity and preparedness to post your work even at the most provisional stage encourages me. There's some interesting stuff happening in your work - a highly decorative element - the ornate city, and the carvings too - I like this element of your work, and I also liked the distortions of the city. I guess the question must be this: what is your visual concept for your adaptation of The Time Machine? What are your design rules? The Time Machine - rather like Metropolis - is exciting because you have two very different cultures, which means you have to find visual ways of communicating those distinct 'tribes'. You have the advanced, clean, sophisticated Eloi, and then the Morlocks and their 'old-school' machines. I'd like to see you beginning to deal with this via your influence maps more - how can you devise two cultures, and express them through the built environment?In terms of your reviews - your content is fine, but they need polish and you need to watch your style - it reads sometimes as if you're 'writing as you're thinking' as opposed to writing what you've thought through. I'm asking students to now approach their reviews with all the formality and respect for academic conventions that would be expected of a written assignment. I want CG students to feel very confident and at ease with academic writing and practice, of course, makes perfect!